literature

despondence.

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Literature Text

it occurs
like a bitter drug,
a blue star awake with
verse. but his
bones don't ache,
no, they never do.


    (yet they quiver;
    disintegrate
    with every quake)


paralysis.

a spine left in
stasis.

the remains of you
turned to nothing but
the scent of
overly-aged
mothballs.

piles
and piles
of dust.

metaphors
trapped
on the edges of
his teeth
and a rhapsody
billowing
in his skull.

his smile crooked
in a moonly manner.

the doldrums
forever trapped
in his lungs
as he burns and burns
and burns
his ways back
to being ash.
Yup, I'm in love with lowercase...again =_=

For the :iconglory-be-project:

:bulletblue: I'm thinking about changing 'bitter' to 'bitterly' to make it read a bit better aloud. What do you think? Crazy?
:bulletblue: How is it overall? Too cliche?
:bulletblue: I'm having a problem with merging lines, so does 'verse' have to be separate with 'awake with' or do they have to be put together?
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flummo's avatar
I was just thinking yes. yes. yes. while reading this. Kriztin this is really something.

"a blue star awake with
verse."

"a spine left in
stasis."

"his smile crooked
in a moonly manner."


moonly manner just agh I love it. take me now.