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I fear the sound of sparrows
and the density of leaves
against dew-muffled blades
of grass,
and I'm drowning
in the sky.
My skin has learned how
to peel itself off
without causing a commotion
in my marrows or
even show the slightest hint
of pain,
and my heart has learned how
to hush the stars in their wake
and keep it all a secret.
There's a sea in my mouth
and I can't swim.
There are lifelines
cast like these and it will
all end with the same tragedy.
and the density of leaves
against dew-muffled blades
of grass,
and I'm drowning
in the sky.
My skin has learned how
to peel itself off
without causing a commotion
in my marrows or
even show the slightest hint
of pain,
and my heart has learned how
to hush the stars in their wake
and keep it all a secret.
There's a sea in my mouth
and I can't swim.
There are lifelines
cast like these and it will
all end with the same tragedy.
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Literature
Nicknames
i. Brevity Girl
Brevity Girl
and her hero, Postcard Man,
write radio spots that channel dead lives
to distracted ears.
These are their superpowers:
Brevity Girl finds power in paradox,
and says most with least.
Postcard Man is a writing machine,
a work horse with tireless enthusiasm
and infinite patience for the sidekick who can’t keep up.
ii. The Queen of Snark
Queen Snark graces few with her presence.
Like any proper queen,
she doesn’t mingle with the riffraff
proffering too big smiles and weak handshakes.
Queen Snark is a meteorologist sensitive to rain,
who keeps an umbrella handy
when the mood is too dark for sarcasm.
i
Literature
Museling
Red wine rambles
curdle the air, but still
you dream; half-moon
body curled in the
lamp light. I am leaving,
I am leaving, choking on
some holy word—
the floorboards creak,
a sonata for my
changeling shadow
whilst you, hair tangled upon
the pillow, are spun gold.
Literature
Sravana Varsa
I'm broken branches
in forest trenches
keeping you safe throughout war
I'm hidden rain-songs
lyrical diphthong
trembling by the cooling shore
The sky is running
with ghost clouds gunning
at the clueless masked lovebirds
The moist earth swells up
filling leaking cups
with our fruitless crippled words
Candlelight flickers
leave souls to wither
as my bones set in for night
Prevernal daydreams
undone at the seams
tease you and wind you up tight
My hair is guided by the sea's deep sighs
My skin is summoned by the auburn glow
We took a vow to live without goodbyes
My hair is guided by the sea's deep sighs
I hear bells resounding like last
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And I am depressed. D-E-P-R-E-S-S-E-D. Help me...
*rainbowsandcookiesand
*
edits will come eventually
Things I'm having a lot of trouble with:
Too flowery? Is it all a big clump of poetic words that it doesn't make sense anymore?
How's the flow? Is it choppy or does the individuality of phrases work?
I want to know your interpretation of this. 
In the third stanza (Specifically or even show the slightest hint of pain), should I remove that part completely, I think it's generic?
Does the punctuation seem inconsistent to you or are in their proper places? Are there certain punctuation marks that need to be changed?
Any other opinions on this piece?
what I have to say on a beautiful piece called flicker by ~escap-ing
And I am depressed. D-E-P-R-E-S-S-E-D. Help me...
*rainbowsandcookiesand
*edits will come eventually
Things I'm having a lot of trouble with:
Too flowery? Is it all a big clump of poetic words that it doesn't make sense anymore? How's the flow? Is it choppy or does the individuality of phrases work? I want to know your interpretation of this. In the third stanza (Specifically or even show the slightest hint of pain), should I remove that part completely, I think it's generic? Does the punctuation seem inconsistent to you or are in their proper places? Are there certain punctuation marks that need to be changed? Any other opinions on this piece? what I have to say on a beautiful piece called flicker by ~escap-ing
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and I'm drowning
in the sky.
and
There's a sea in my mouth
and I can't swim.
are made of perfection
in the sky.
and
There's a sea in my mouth
and I can't swim.
are made of perfection