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What help would a
lovesong do
to enrapture a heart
when it is dead?

    dearest lover
    dearest fire-savaged queen
    dearest tiger-boned boy

    your letters aren't
    the frame of your words,
    they're just words-

    like beasts hung
    on the edge of
    your throats

    like cold, cold nights
    and your bare back
    entwined
    with a ghost
.

empty chambers
empty tears
empty summers-

the sweetness insinuated
in springtide glissando

(vibrations
cadence
portamento)

but tongues unfurl
and the slur of speech
escaping from dark cavern teeth
roil and tumble and

crash.

what should've been mockingbirds
were crows that scratched
vocal chords into pieces,
abrasions
bound to unforgettable

(and unrequited)

    so,love
    do you hear me now?

    can you listen with
    ears tucked in snow
    and wet hair?

    can my song uplift you
    to a postmortem heaven

    or would it stay
    in the silence?


monsoon disasters
of an aching chest,
shattering
crumbling glass

but lest it never happened
for the first
(hopefully not the last).

    What help would a
    lovesong do
    to enrapture a heart
    when it's dead?
11/6/13 (well 5 to be exact but I edited this thing anyway)
 
Dedicated to the unrequited Eponine in Les Miserables.

Funny to dedicate something to a fictional character. But I feel her though, loving someone who can't love you back. 

That feeling when you know your crush would never ever ever like you back </3

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hypermagical Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013
Poor Eponine. :crying:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I know!!! :cries: wahaha He should't be with Cosette. I'm sorry but.... wahaha :/
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
:XD: Don't apologize to me, I'm on that same ship. :iconmhmmplz:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh oh OH! Damn girl yeah! *snaps in a zigzag motion* :iconmhmmplz:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013
*snaps with no fingers* New levels of cool. :eyes:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcrazydanceplz: :icongoingcrazyplz:
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hypermagical Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2013
:XD:
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is very well put together and meaningful.  "Tongues unfurl" is such a cool phrase.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much! :huggle:

how are you these days, by the way? I don't have that much time here anymore so things are getting pretty...woah Nelly.
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

Pretty good.  Got my book published (finally!).  I see you got a DD!  Congratulations!  Not sure why I didn't see that in my inbox, though...

Snowed in today (and yesterday, and probably tomorrow).  Cold too.  But the smooth whiteness (or ice crystal) is kind of pretty.  =)

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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
really? what's the title? might if I get a digital copy? I can't get anything shipped online :< not allowed to :<

Ooh thank you so much!

Wish it snowed here in the Philippines, though. I would die to experience snow.
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

www.smashwords.com/books/view/…

 

Or if you have iTunes, it's in the iTunes bookstore.  Thank you!  =)

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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
so your name's Stephen :3
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist

LOL. stalker..

 

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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
mehehehehe :giggles:
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(sigh) (pats back) Sweety, your poem was the saddest thing I've ever read... but its reality... You can't change it...

To answer your last question, it reminds you of the people you loved... And specifically that one person... who you think of everytime you listen to that song... everytime its turned on, your innately remembering her... and then its gone... its over... You're as dead as the dead... But you can't die, and you have to live with that realization... That's why you're listening to that lovesong... because its a lesson for you, and you have to live with it.

Why do I say all this? Because love's a bloody stinking (curses) and it doesn't give a hoot about anyone... I won't go into details but I'll honestly admit this:

Your poem is definitely going in my list of poems I certainly have to consider my all-time favorite... I've added this to my profile... And that list is those deviations I'll run back to whenever I can manage... because they're all awesome...

Your poem was spot on... My only problem is with the title. I seriously had a pervert reference when I saw that.

How about change it to "Lovesong?" or "Can Dead Hearts Resurrect?" or "would you come back, if I do?" or something... maybe even "bitter bliss in corroding realities" would work out... Because this is a really good poem... I enjoyed it... Every minute of it :)
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
a year late-again *runs to the corner of the moon*

Yeah the title has been bugging me for a year (I am definitely not kidding about that). Maybe something less abstract idk
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*snatches you from the moon*

try something less abstract. This title sounds like a dildo. Honestly.

The poem itself is really cool.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
A dildo? HAHAHAHAHAHAHAH xD
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
no, really... I'm serious.

    dearest lover
    dearest fire-savaged queen
    dearest tiger-boned boy
(vibrations
cadence
portamento) 
If you keep that title, these two stanzas just sound like dildo talk... Its so weird honestly.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it...does...shit 

xD
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
lol sorry.

Bad mind :shakefist:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm *googles for titles*
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