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We've been distant,
but I always hoped that
the dusts of you has
been left unlaid,
the bruises of stars aching
for that one sacrifice
that tore these ocean tears
apart like those dark,
unforgiving gods
who never pitied y(our)
existence.

I never told you
how much you meant to me
right before you swallowed
all that bitterness in you
(wish I did.

I wish I did.)

You always reminded me
of a father,
you always did.
And as much as I don't
want to let go,
this string can't stay in my hands
much longer
(ten years of no direct contact
and I want it all to
be filled by you.

a void in my lungs
that always waited for
that warmth of your breath)

And I could never have understood
how ash turns into helium,
and I never understood how that
could ever be you
in the first place
but there

there you go

let the skies
embrace you                                                          

                                                         
5-22-13

Not a poem, but a vent for emotion

This is pretty dang self-explanatory. I needed a vent.

For my 44-year-old grandfather, who took his own life away a year ago after some drunk accident. I get one of those days where I miss him so badly because he was my father when my own father looked for jobs some ten or thirteen odd years ago.

He even taught me a few letters of the alphabet back then :laughing:

These are one of those days. Wish I was there for him... :(

EDITED: grammer miships ( and I wish you knew that this comment is a sad joke and I'm trying to make you laugh :lol:) :icontumbleweedplz:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2013  Student Writer
I envisioned a cremation. I'm so sorry about your lolo Kriz, that's too young an age to die.
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DragonsChest Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Fantastic poem...
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Daftendueler Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
This is just sad. I have never met any of my real grandpas. Both were dead before I could see their faces. Condolence.

Oh hi there. Made an account so to comment :D This is Niks.
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SamuelVi Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
So emotional but I love it, I liked the 'y(our)' bit, never saw that sort of thing in a poem before :)
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cality Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry for your loss. :huggle:

The semi-repetition (if I can call it that) is so lovely, e.g. '(wish I did. / I wish I did.)' and 'but there / there you go'.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I guess you could say that :D
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cality Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is beautiful. Some grammar glitches here and there, but that's little stuff compared to the emotion of this.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness you are a lifesaver. Where? Could you spot those for me? This was made fresh and I needed a vent so forgive me for this :iconsweatdropplz:
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Adrolyn Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'll note you.
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