LAZY TITLES GALORE! xD
Does the title bother you as a reader?
Poem's a bit too hipster?
Is the lack of capitalization annoying? (It's this style I can't seem to rub off and it's annoying me, just let me know if it ruins my work).
Does the first and second stanza harmonize each other? How's the rhyming?
How are the line breaks in the last stanza? off-putting? Jarring at least?
Speaking of the last stanza, is it off-putting to the poem overall? Does it connect?
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