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she is honey curls
and honeysuckle,
golden sweet

wherever the sun touches.
on most days, her lips
curl the slightest smile-
head tilted where
the sky is but a

touch of blue-
and utters the word
'beaut(if)ul' as if in question.
her feet shuffle
and her arms
close like a space
too narrow

for the word
to reach

like silent syllables
in French;
graceful and unspoken.
NaPoWriMo'15 Day 2 Who's Belva?

Belva's this 1920s OC girl I made for a short story I'm working on. And she's my favorite so far. She works as an English teacher in school months and as a hotel maid in the summer. She's considered kind of chubby for a girl in the 1920s with think, honey curls but she's really pretty, bubbly and has a lot of wit (surprisingly). It's not really in my nature to like gals like her but when I imagine her while writing the short story, she relaxes me. She's everything good but she's severely insecure about herself, especially her weight, which is something I desperately don't like about her but hey everyone has a weakness. And it's really expected in a woman in the first Post-War era. Women in this decade were weight conscious and wow I can't believe that trails up to now (clarify me about this).

I don't wanna spoil any further! :heart:

And the poem deviates from the decade she's in but what the heck. xD

:bulletblue: does the (if) and the overall transition from beautiful to insecure seem unnecessary?
   the world's
 whirring trapped
  in summer skull

ears bloated &
  the spine's interstitial
fluid in a heated
 frenzy with prickly
  skin and

 the body is heavy
  with the weight
 on wobbly, bruised

 the air
thick with


& these ears
 oh these

trapped needles
 & bullets
& the pain of


the art of

am i

or  is  the  world
  s p i n n i n g

around me?
vertigo and bruised knees in summer
NaPoWriMo'15 Day 1 (Late Post)

original title: vertigo & bruised knees in summer (yeah, the ampersand's on my notebook)

STORY TIME!!! (It isn't necessary but it's not such a bad thing, now is it?)
Knee Injury
After exams, I tripped on the rocky part of school on the way home. I got hit where my knee joint bends so there. Frickin' klutz.

Earlier than the moment I wrote this poem, I went to a friend's house. After catching up and eating good food and doing a bit of film photography (well her-I was partially her subject so yeah). It was going great until I was about to go home. The world was spinning (or maybe it was me-it felt bad) I had a sudden pang in my chest and my spine felt like a thousand needles shooting like darts all at the same time. I felt my nerves. What was worse was how my ears felt. I felt as if my whole head was about to explode-especially the ears.

She got concerned but I passed it off as fine and endured it until I went home. I couldn't move well, so I asked help from my dad. Then I fainted. Since he's a retired nurse, he came to my aid immediately and said it could be vertigo. And to make sure, he did what a nurse did and checked me up the way a nurse would. And we did go to a hospital. Confirmed: Vertigo. My dad was right. So yay vertigo! xD I didn't know it could hurt this much! xD As for the chest pain-it's weight related :/

I took a rest and let it subside, deciding to write in the process. Bad idea, but good output xD As a result, this short thing took an hour to make (stop-and-go cause of the dizziness) and, the next day, I read it over and noticed the thing wasn't straight in general xD Yeah, that up there isn't form or whatever. It's ACTUALLY what it looks like when I wrote it on my notebook.

But I think it works! :3 If anyone else got vertigo, comment below and tell me more about your experience-cause this is my first xD I only shared this in dA cause I don't know. I don't want my friend to be concerned about me especially if she finds out it was AFTER my visit to her house so hush hush xD (But then she does stalk me so..we'll see :) )

:bulletblue: Does the disjointed form work for this?
give yourself a flower
and wear your favorite

sit in a nice, quiet
little coffee shop

and meet yourself
with that first sip
of warmth
and a smile.

in the afternoon,
walk to the nearest park
and hold your hands
as if in a prayer

like a lover's dream,
be sweet to yourself
for once.

let the kid with the waffle cone
and his mother
stare at you for 45 seconds
while you feed the birds

hang those insecurities
by the door
or tuck them away
in your cabinets
or drawers-

just take them off
pick a hot red dress
and buy yourself
a drink for two

mirror at one end
of the table
and your love
at the other.
look at the mirror and fall in love at first sight
Feb. 14, 2015 (funny how I wrote two poems and drew 4 sketches that day. cheers to lovin' yourself) :heart:

"The time will come 
when, with elation 
you will greet yourself arriving 
at your own door, in your own mirror 
and each will smile at the other's welcome, 

and say, sit here. Eat. 
You will love again the stranger who was your self.
Give wine. Give bread. Give back your heart 
to itself, to the stranger who has loved you 

all your life, whom you ignored 
for another, who knows you by heart. 
Take down the love letters from the bookshelf, 

the photographs, the desperate notes, 
peel your own image from the mirror. 
Sit. Feast on your life. "

                            -Derek Walcott. Love after Love

That's my kind of valentine. Loving myself as I celebrate the season of love. I got sick of the "Valentine for rent" post in facebook and everything bad about being alone in 14. Just the bland depression of being alone. I have my insecurities and I haven't fully loved my being yet but every Feb. 14 I give a little extra effort to love myself even though it's hard because at the end of the day all I have is myself. Besides, I find that the best Valentine date/s are family (even if it is a bit chaotic) and a chock-ful of loving friends. :heart:

</span>Late submission for my poem, sorry, but I don't care. I just got wi-fi today. 


Kriz-Sn. Get it?
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pasta,coffee,dogs,Libra,and a whole lot of [weird] thinking left in the reincarnation of a 15-year-old body...

I write, mostly. Sometimes draw, fangirl, watch movies and wish, wish, wish

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Happy New Year, guys! :D

Wed Dec 31, 2014, 4:46 AM
To whom it may concern

I hope you celebrate the last few hours of 2014 with such wonder and I hope the firecracker spirit gets into you! :heart:


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okay just about everyone in dA! Happy 2015 guys! I hope it does good to you! :)

your head is a living
full of songbirds
-e.e. cummings

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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2015   Writer
:tighthug: :huggle: :heart:
brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
awwwww :love: :huggle:

how are you?
Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2015   Writer
:heart: :blowkiss:

I've been truly wonderful, thank you (: How about you?
brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Stressed but not depressed :heart:

btw: Sarah and Phil Kay/e are going to perform in my country in March! Can't go but I'm happy still because they're here! :heart:
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katworks Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015
thank you :hug:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! :huggle:
Clockchat Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
Hug I'll happily give a hug to the gal who not only was kind enough to leave valuable insight into my "Reconciliation" deviation (which I'll respond to properly soon!) but also was so sweet as to link to it in her Visiting Melville (which I'll also happily comment on, even if I'm far from great at critique!). May you be having an excellent day.
brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
You deserved it! :huggle:

May you be filled with happiness :huggle:
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